Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People should keep trying to reach their goals even if they seem impossible to achieve Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “People should keep trying to reach their goals, even if they seem impossible to achieve.” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

No one can deny the fact that everyone in the world attempt to achieve something bigger in their life. During the course, some people attain success in first place whereas some do not. In the given scenario, it is perceived that whether or not to chase what we want although they are likely to be impossible? Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that unquestionably, we should try harder and harder until we reach our goal. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To commence with, we all know no body is perfect in this world. Everybody has flaws in them and having said that this should not be the reason to neglect our dream to come true. To be more precise, although we failed in our first attempt, will the knowledge learned by our former mistake we can achieve our goal. Drawing from my own experience, my sister once she failed in an exam at first she was so frustrated at that time however she motivated herself to try again and second she worked harder than before. Then guess what? She aced her exam with top score. Indded, with the high determination and courage we can achieve our goal someday for sure.
Secondly, the biggest attribute one can have is the courage to learn lesson from past mistake. Eventhough we failed in a first try we should not be dissapointed instead we can try with distinct methodology learned from our past experience. I have wittnessed in my own experience. What would happen if my sister had not tried for second attempt? Undoubtedly, she would never passed her exam. Most importantly, she applied all the knowledge that she gained from her prior mistake. Therefore, failure is a part of life and we should accept it as a lesson rather than a factor of demotivation.The above mentioned statements sounds reasonable however we might get failures for hundredth times and we might even get frustrated with our life. This can affect our mental health and this should not be overlooked. Hence, we should always remember that everything happens for a good reason and keep in mind that success will surely come to the door of those who never step back from their dream.
All things considered, despite the fact that something in life seems not to be attainable, we should never give up and keep on trying until we reach our goal.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...he given scenario, it is perceived that whether or not to chase what we want although they are...
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Line 2, column 31, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'nobody'?
Suggestion: nobody
...agraphs. To commence with, we all know no body is perfect in this world. Everybody has...
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Line 2, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...irst attempt, will the knowledge learned by our former mistake we can achieve our...
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Line 3, column 223, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
...h distinct methodology learned from our past experience. I have wittnessed in my own experience...
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Line 3, column 589, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...on rather than a factor of demotivation.The above mentioned statements sounds reaso...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67567567568 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54774687367 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528255528256 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4079188216 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155117032207 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0464762178738 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372272880139 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117715063233 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272364976193 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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