Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal interests, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
No one can deny the fact that almost every people in this earth have some sort of hobbies be it dancing, singing, teaching, acting and so on. In the given scenario, it is perceived that they expend more time in exploring their interest and some consider this is good. Whereas other find it quiet annoying as they must focus on their other duties instead. Meanwhile, I am of the opinion that it is imperative that people have to do task what their heart desires. This way they can excel in a field what interest them the most. I feel this way for following reasons which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To commence, people tend to attain more success only if they concentrates whole heartedly. To be more precise, if a person remain persistent in a particular things until they achieve their goal, although they might experience failure initially however they end up achieving success. Drawing from my own experience, my brother always wanted to be a teacher since it was his passion nevertheless his parents forced him to do medicine which was not his interest. Even though, he continued his study, he could not passed his exam and consequently he gave up. Later on, he initiated teaching in school and then high school and now he is a well known professor of our town. He finally made his passion a career. Indeed, if a person is compelled to do something out of their comfort zone then they could never get succeed.
Secondly, doing things what makes our heart joyful makes us a creative person. To be more clear, if we find something interesting and even though it looks tough we prompt to find each and every possible way to excel it. My little sister is a compelling evidence of it. Her hobby is painting and every time she sketch something new related to her own personal life. In addition, she puts her 100 percent effort to make it perfect. Needless to say, observing her activity I could say she will be a good artist in future for sure. Therefore, no matter it is children or adult if we accord them a chance to do whatever they prefer then unquestionably they will foster in their career.
All things considered, complusion is something that confined person within certain limitation. People should be given chance to explore their inner heart and do what interest them. Only then they could be contented and do some magical things in their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nterest and some consider this is good. Whereas other find it quiet annoying as they mu...
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...eart desires. This way they can excel in a field what interest them the most. I f...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'concentrate'
Suggestion: concentrate
...end to attain more success only if they concentrates whole heartedly. To be more precise, if...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...erson remain persistent in a particular things until they achieve their goal, although...
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...ce failure initially however they end up achieving success. Drawing from my own e...
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Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'pass'
Suggestion: pass
...h, he continued his study, he could not passed his exam and consequently he gave up. L...
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Suggestion:
... now he is a well known professor of our town. He finally made his passion a care...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'sketches'.
Suggestion: sketches
...er hobby is painting and every time she sketch something new related to her own person...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, while, i feel, in addition, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1959.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68660287081 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5210964008 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55023923445 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4029809877 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.1739130435 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1739130435 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113454338671 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349776525153 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293276329573 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0750184731245 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019112485627 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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