Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to explore new things around the world. Although many would argue the people today waste their time in entertainment activities. In my opinion, Nowadays, people didn't have enough time to finish the important things in their life due to a lot of the burdens of life. On the other hand, This does not prevent that there must be a recreation part in life. I would suggest two reasons based on the general facts in addition to my personal experiences to support the argument.
The first aspect points out is that there has been positive between trying to do new activities and being successful. Admittedly, many benefits quickly stem from enjoyment-doing things they like to do. I would like to mention noteworthy research conducted by CSR institute in India. The discovered results suggest that Seventy-Five Percent of the people indulge themselves in the right activities to know everything around of them such as Whatsapp and Facebook to be they able to follow the world. Furthermore, doing some activities in people's life has a great importance on the quality of one's life.
Secondly, in today's world, people believe in the performance. There is a proverb in my country, that said; "likewise nuts that need dirt environment to grow, success is vital for growing and becoming a valuable person". I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that the competition in the labor market become is very difficulty, So people should to doing more effort to succeed, Moreover, they haven't much time to spend it in wrong activities. For example, I remember when graduated from my university I hadn't any time free due to I was spent a plethora of time to take courses to improve my skills to get a good job and high salary, In contrast, many of my friends spent much time to playing football and do exercises in Gym and till now they have not got a good job like me.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I mentioned above, I strongly believe that the life today became hard, so, people have not to spent much time in wrong activities but we should do some activities enjoying like to do, to give us positive energy to will be able to continue our lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for example, in addition, in contrast, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76322418136 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72622290049 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554156171285 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.8828667498 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.066666667 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4666666667 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5333333333 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333451806617 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104943636812 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098657517543 0.0737576698707 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200719170326 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0643897253506 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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