A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose?
Nature supports humanity and humanity supports different types of arts but the most important call to action as per government, various NGO and industries is nature that is our environment, the place we live in. Actually, people's attitudes toward this issue are varied from person to person. Although many would argue that the arts in the society are the most important factor in nation-building, I believe that the protected environment has a far greater impact. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts in addition to my personal experience to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that what provokes people to spend some money to develop environment is having a healthier life. In fact, as time marches on, air pollution has become a major problem in most megacities as it continues to pose a potential threat to people’s health. Take the case of an old person or a patient who has a respiratory problem for instance. Not only does it damage their immune systems, but also it limits their daily activities especially in winter when the pollutants in the weather are intensified, so undoubtedly a detailed and careful plan and a large annual budget are needed to reducing air pollution and its adverse effects on environment and human. There are several ways to encounter with this major problem; A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above, renewable energy should be substituted for burning fossil fuels which cause a large number of harmful gases. Also, a group of scientists has recently reached a technology for producing fuel from the waste of animals, which is less harmful but more expensive to manufacture. Hence, this money can be given to one of these research teams to complete their researches and even produce some quantity of these fuels.
Hence, in addition to the pollutants, because we need to wood to use them for building, most forests are exhausted and leave the land without trees. When governments cut many trees and use their logs for building, a lot of animals will be affected because they destroy their habitats and decrease their reproduction. For example, I read an article about the importance the forests on the environment, the author asserts that reduce in forest devastate to us since a decrease in the release of oxygen and increase carbon dioxide. He adds that also will increase endangered animals and if one species will extinct, this will lead to losing the opportunity to save our existence. This book taught me that all we should encourage companies and organization to take care of our planet.
By the way of conclusion, based on the argument above, I strongly believe that this company Should use the money to save our earth. Not does help to relieve pollutants, but it also saves forests and animals from extinction which a very hard task to reverse. All we should participate to protect and live in a safe place.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 903, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ed for burning fossil fuels which cause a large number of harmful gases. Also, a group of scienti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91330645161 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7249227607 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558467741935 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.9422930146 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.263157895 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1052631579 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133644756014 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396046086511 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0408522742498 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0859967988033 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403695978961 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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