Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans, modern technology, and globalization, more and more people tend to explore new things. particularly, young generation. Actually, people attitude towards the decisions of the young learners in society is varied from person to person. Although many would argue the adults is the most important to nation building, In my opinion, Nowadays, young people have an a great impact on society. I would suggest two reasons based on the general fact to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that many benefits quickly stem from the young generation. Admittedly, young people is a great teacher to build society and make the right decisions in different situations but they meet many obstacles. I would like to mention noteworthy researched conducted by CSR institute in India. The discovered results suggest that Seventy-Five Percent of young generation indulge themselves in the right activities to help the government and society to become a creative society. It is widely accepted that society today to become more and more competitive. To survive in this society, young people today under great pressure by society. For instance, At work, you have to compete with your colleagues so-as-to win heart of in-charge, to gain a promotion to get a high salary which is helps me to participate in a decisions of society.
Secondly, there has been a positive correlation between young people and being successful in society. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that young people contributes to widening people's horizon, which will influence profoundly on society. My own experience is a compelling example of this I remember when I was a child, my big brother after he finished his university, he traveled in the USA to learn how the people to doing research in histopathology and how they people to discovery these diseases. Furthermore, he learned a lot of things there and come back to home to open a big center in his country to help the government to avoid the people from the diseases which to support the country to become healthier than before. I would like to mention proverb in my country, that said:"likewise nuts need that dirt environment to grow, the young people is vital for growing and becoming valuable persons"; Consequently, the young generation needs a big space from the society and also from government to work more to effect for the society.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that the young people have a close tie-in motivation and creativity on society due to the young generation has much knowledge and they are known to use the technology more than adults.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Particularly
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a decision' or simply 'decisions'?
Suggestion: a decision; decisions
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Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
... which to support the country to become more healthier than before. I would like to mention pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2295.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 456.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03289473684 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91472366359 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513157894737 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 725.4 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.6579705213 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.5 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246411173843 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770510843284 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376016067738 0.0737576698707 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154895415965 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218462543203 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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