Compare and contrast the way of your life with that of your parents. Which way of life do you think would be more satisfying for the next generations?
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans modern society, more and more people tend to explore new things, Actually, people's attitudes towards this issue are varied from person to person. Although many would argue that the lonely lives is the most important factor in nation building characters, I think the life with your parents at least In the early years has a far greater impact to the person in future life. but both of ways are important to improve the children to achieve their goals and depend on themselves. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts in addition to my personal experiences to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that, parents are great teachers to build the character, Our family specifically, mother and father are the most important part of our lives. the efficiency of a society is measured by the degree and the quality of its family bonding between the children and parents. As time passes, the child gets more exposure of the world and starts involving into a more real situation. If we look into the present world, there will be a lot of differences in our time and parents' time. my own experience is a compelling example of this, I remember when I was in secondary school I had a lot of problems with my friends and my instructor in my school because I was nervous always towards other sex and I couldn't to talk with them due to I was self-conscious and stubborn towards this culture, furthermore, my father stayed with me a lot of time to learn me how to contact with this culture and talk with them easily, In indeed, My father changed me many things in my life which it became a moderate personality. I don't visualize my life without my parents with me, specifically, In the early years to teach me more and more things in the world.
On the other hand, In modern life technology improves lifestyle. One of the most important abilities in life is creativity, which leads to improvements and development of a much exciting way to live. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what has elaborated above, using the internet saves time and effort. Parents usually suffer to understand new developments on technology, such as how to use smartphones. In fact, modern generation uses mobile and online communication all the time to be informed of news in the world and with friends almost in real-time. In addition, today we design machines and technology in order to save much time to create other machines, and we are not able to entertain our life like our parents. Over time life turns to be faster and faster, therefore the life of the future generation will get harder and harder.
In conclusion, based on the argument above, I strongly believe that the life changes over time in terms of lifestyle, the impact of technology and learning methods. While parents and modern life are different, each has its own benefits and disadvantages. I think my way of life would satisfy the next generation as it has the capacity to change and develop. Indeed, today’s life offers exciting experiences as a worldwide possibility to interact with others.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, furthermore, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, at least, i think, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74863387978 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71730343241 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488160291439 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 835.2 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.1380610315 48.9658058833 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.142857143 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1428571429 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47619047619 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267173889954 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828273285585 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0795154508973 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176643096655 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533244175308 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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