TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universit
At the turn of the new century, with the development of humans and modern technology, more and more people tend to explore new things. particularly, children. Actually, people attitude towards spending money for universities or education are varied from person to person. Although many would argue spend money for the campus is the most important factor in nation building, In my opinion, spend money on the education of pupils has a great impact. I would suggest two reasons based on my general facts to support the argument.
The first aspect to point out is that many benefits quickly stem from spending money on education. Admittedly, there has been a positive correlation between spending money on basic stages of education and being successful. I would like to mention noteworthy researched conducted by CSR institute in India. the discovered result suggest that Seventy-Five Percent of governments around the world indulge themselves to discover how to improve the environment of education for children because they are the future of society. For instance, I remember when in primary school I didn't like go to school because I didn't play there, so the government put a lot of systems to attract the children to come to school. Furthermore, success has a close tie-in motivation and creativity in society.
Secondly, improving education has a great importance on the quality of children life. I still affirm the same idea because there is no guarantee that many methods different of learning contribute widening pupils horizon, which will influence profoundly on society. My own experience is a compelling example of this I remember when I was ten years I had a problem in pronounce of words, and my teacher tried with me more and more time to improve but the end I could not. Moreover, she tried with me but in other methods. With the passage of time, I improved through a new method in education. So I would mention proverb in my country, that said, "likewise nuts that need dirt environment to grow, children is vital for growing and becoming a valuable person to effected on the society"; Consequently, improving education is a great teacher to build character.
To draw a conclusion, taking what I have mentioned above, I strongly believe that the government should to spend more money to improve the environment of education for children due to they are future of our society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, likewise, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2011.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06549118388 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90725934859 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534005037783 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1009926147 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.294117647 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3529411765 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308103678103 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866591709058 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690573567739 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195404717236 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535493600082 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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