On facing the problem of spending time on personal enjoyment-doing things or the things should be done, people find themselves in a dilemma. Some people are inclined to choose the things they should do. However, as far as I am concerned, people today spend too much time on personal things which they enjoyed since these things can help them build their skills and could stimulate people\'s inspiration. Initially, doing something you really like can build up one\'s expertise. On the one hand, chances are that while you are doing the right things you can strongly build up your skills. On the other hand, in retrospect, I can think of no better examples to emphasize my viewpoint than myself. I can well remember there was a time I was chatting with one of my best friends, we are talking about our common interest, buying clothes for our dolls. Suddenly, a flash came through my mind, I suggested why don\'t we make some clothes own? Thanks to our major, though hard and clumsy, we finished this idea through diel hardship. This experience taught me that people are willing to spend more time on their personal things even unnecessary. We can not only enjoyed ourselves but also learning some knowledge from them. Secondly, enjoyment-doing things are more likely to inspire person. I heard a quota which goes like this," Every one should focus on something you really like." I can\'t think too highly of it. A survey conducted by the SA Institution picked 120 people with diversity and grouped them into two parts. One group were asked to do regular works every day, and the other group were asked to pick one job they are interested in. After two weeks, the participants were judged through the quality of their works and daily efficiency. The result shows that the latter were evidently more efficient and more positive towards their work. Conceivably, people today are more likely to spend more time on personal enjoyment-doing things thanks to their inspiration. Admittedly, with the accelerating development of our social, interests and obligation have been playing two important roles in our life, it\'s hard to judge which has more significance. It is undoubtedly that spending more time on the thing people should do has merits dear to us. Daily life need the support of multitudinous monotonous things, only by joint efforts can we be blessed with a harmony society. However, inviting as it seems, it also contributes various negative effects. Virtually, doing work repeatedly day by day will kill the creativity of human beings and ultimately out of the pace of the world. Under some circumstances, it suits, whereas, take a closer scrutiny, its disadvantages outweigh its advantages. Compared with spending more time on your enjoyment-doing things, doing things they should do is inferior. In a nutshell, viewing all the detailed points, there is every reason for us to firmly believe that people today are spend too much time on personal interests since these things can not merely strength our skills but inspire us as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1153, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'enjoy'
Suggestion: enjoy
...hings even unnecessary. We can not only enjoyed ourselves but also learning some knowle...
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Line 1, column 1319, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...on. I heard a quota which goes like this,' Every one should focus on something yo...
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Line 1, column 2927, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
...to firmly believe that people today are spend too much time on personal interests sin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, while, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2538.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 508.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99606299213 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72564090779 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 212.727598566 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523622047244 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1475090785 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6153846154 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430541855269 0.236089414692 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135655082693 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15013759164 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.430541855269 0.150856017488 285% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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