Worrying about the pest damage, the vice president suggests to return to Buzzoff, the pest control company, for all the storage warehouses. To support this recommendation, the vice president compares to pest damage events in two places which being charged by different pest control companies(Fly-Away and the Buzzoff). Although there are both lost in the two warehouses, the one charged by Fly-Away company lost as double times as the one charged by Buzzoff. Even if the charge price of the Fly-Away is lower, the vice president makes this suggestion. While the statement is problematic as there are loopholes in thie author's evidence and analyzations. We should evaluate them carefully.
To begin with, the pest damage as well as the consideration of choosing pest control company should be taken separately which the author does not want, while it is an siginificant viewpoint as the difference among all of the warehouses. Firstly, the locations of the two warehouses are different which means lots of cases would vary as the temperature and humidity which influence on the spicies of the pests from termites to flies which we can not tell as the author does not make it clear. Thus it directly affects the choice of pest control company as maybe they are specialized in different pests. Secondly, the food stored in the warehouses maybe different as the pests and the dmands of storing also vary, llike the food stored in the Palm City warehouses is fresh fruits which could not be preserved for a long time, so maybe it is not the problem of sales rather than of a pest control company could solve. On the other hand , the food with low pest damage in the Wintervale are nuts which are relatively easy to be preserved. While there is also a lost of $10,000 dollars. Thus the feasance of the Buzz Off company is in question.
In addtion, as both of the store warehouses all suffered a lost by the pest damage, the policy of changing pest control company is not the first choice of the vice president befroe he finds out what happened to the two warehouses. Firstly, what caused the pest damge is essential to solve the problem,as it would not work if the pest company does not know what their enemy is. Maybe the pest is not from the warehouse instead they are invasion species which could not be controled by a pest control company. Secondly, the running condtions of the pest control companies are the inportant reference for the leadership. The highr pirce of the pest control charge is not neccesarily meaning of good pest control quality. Thus, the companies condtions should be acknowledged by the vicepresident.
In all ,the vice president's evidence and analyzations are not convincing to prove his recommendations. To further his suggestion, he should make a wider survey of all of the warehouses to find out what really causes the pest damage, then compare more companies besides the two metioned above as they all make lost to the food distribution company.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 507 350
No. of Characters: 2418 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.745 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.769 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.656 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.691 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...h the author does not want, while it is an siginificant viewpoint as the differenc...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...icant viewpoint as the difference among all of the warehouses. Firstly, the locations of t...
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Line 3, column 493, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...l as the author does not make it clear. Thus it directly affects the choice of pest ...
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Line 3, column 933, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...l company could solve. On the other hand , the food with low pest damage in the Wi...
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Line 3, column 1013, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Wintervale are nuts which are relatively easy to be preserved. While there is als...
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Line 3, column 1082, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... there is also a lost of 0,000 dollars. Thus the feasance of the Buzz Off company is...
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Line 5, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sident befroe he finds out what happened to the two warehouses. Firstly, what cau...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , as
... damge is essential to solve the problem,as it would not work if the pest company d...
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Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pecies which could not be controled by a pest control company. Secondly, the runn...
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Line 7, column 7, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...owledged by the vicepresident. In all ,the vice presidents evidence and analyza...
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Line 7, column 54, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ice presidents evidence and analyzations are not convincing to prove his recommen...
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Line 7, column 75, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: proving
...ce and analyzations are not convincing to prove his recommendations. To further his sug...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...stion, he should make a wider survey of all of the warehouses to find out what really caus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2472.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 506.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88537549407 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75398428243 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430830039526 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 768.6 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.4415713278 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.714285714 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0952380952 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 5.70786347227 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360705671137 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115462304198 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637295121416 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224014649459 0.128457276422 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618305977833 0.0628817314937 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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