Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modern and contemporary life which we live in everybody is created to accomplish a gola in their lives and pinpoint the apex in their life. However, some circumstances that explain below, will cause humanbeings to not perform the thing he should do then circumvent them to do what they like to do.
To begin with, the major and intrinsic problem that cause people to evade from their dominant goal is that they are tedious from struggling in their life and give up. Therfore, they start to go after kinds of stuff which make them happier. For Instance, I have got several friends in high school and college which they are so astute and brilliant having bright future in eengineering fields but because of being boared from studying and attending to class, they quit education and be immensly stoic to their future. Moreover they attend to play computer games and having no plans for their career and the thing they are foing to do in following years.
Secondly, the second extrinsic problem which made people to not follow the thing what they are created for is scoial media. Freshly, by celebrating technology and spreading out between youths, some companies like Youtube, Instagram, Telegram and so on emerge based on this happening. these called social media and their aim is to connect and relate the users together and make communication more straightforward. In the other hand, these medias cause youths and teenagers become addicted to them. As result, they avoid them to concentrate on their education and stop to being imapctful for their society. The critical situation comprehend when we understood these medias cause the appereance of several social disorders that cause the whole generation to detrioate.
In nutshell, In modern society, Everyone is created to perfom something and reach the significant goal but several intrinsic and extrinsic issues cause to avoid them from their pinnacles. The intrinsic one is the state that happened inside the person's attribute and halt him from making effort to take the success path. The extrinsic reason is the influence of others like social medias that addict their users unintentionally. In my opinion, these two reasons cause people away from their zenith.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 366.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13114754098 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60085898062 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554644808743 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5411793609 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.375 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133875546037 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478913866647 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689329479404 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0940966820787 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569901280289 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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