During the past centeries there has been a lot of inventions that affected the human's life. Many claim that these inventions had an enormous impact on the culture and the way that people live. Some people think that the people of today spend too much time on personal enjoyment. This idea has been a topic of discussion especially in the last couple of decades as the technology has improved immensely. I disagree with this idea. I believe that people of today are doing just fine and they spend time the way that they should. I will elucidate my point of view in the rest of this essay.
First, people now don't have to do a lot of activities that people in the past had to do and this saves them a lot of time. Humans in the past had to struggle only to provide their essential needs for living. For example, they didn't have water at their homes and they had to walk for maybe hours just to bring some water for drinking. In this way they had to spend a lot of their time in a day just to do simple tasks like these. But because of the advances in the technology, these tasks have become way easier and no one has to spend a lot of time on these kind of activies anymore and as a result people have more leisure time that can be used for personal enjoment.
Second, I believe that if someone wants to be successful at something, that person should do what he likes. If the job that you do is not a personal enjoyment you will only suffer. Because many people don't like what they do at their jobs, they get bored and resentful at work. They only seek free times and they try to find ways to evade the work they have to do. Many great and successful people have mentioned this point. For example there is an famous saying from Steve Jobs that states : the only way to do something great is to love what you do. So I believe that people should spend more time on personal enjoyments and make a living from that enjoyment.
To sum up, because of the advances of technology poeple of today has more time to spend on personal enjoyments and also if one wants to be successful he should do what he loves not what he has to do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: humans'; human's
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...ventions that affected the humans life. Many claim that these inventions had an enormous i...
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...g, that person should do what he likes. If the job that you do is not a personal e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, as to, for example, kind of, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1724.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.25679012346 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.17742905998 2.67179642975 81% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424691358025 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5208468726 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.2 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388065714505 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133454500816 0.076458572812 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107339802194 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.255101965805 0.150856017488 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0730608859382 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.43 10.9000537634 68% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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