Nowadays, many children like to play computer games. Therefore, many parents are worried. However, some experts argue that computer games are good for children. I completely disagree with this opinion. I will tell you two reasons to support my opinion.
First, computer games interfere with studying. On the school days it is a battle between who studies longer and more diligently. On the other hand, even computer games can be addictive, so it is very harmful to the students. I have never seen a person who is both good at studying and playing computer games. Like this, students do not have enough time to concentrate on their studies because it is difficult to do well in both. For example, in my school, one boy is very good at studying, but after he became addicted to games, his grades have dropped dramatically and eventually dropped from first to middle. Computers take time out and even ruin our school days.
Second, computer games have nothing to gain compared to the investment. Some experts say that computer games are good for the brain. However, this is only for a few games and it will help very little if it helps. Most not only waste a lot of time but also cause many health problems such as headaches, impired vision and herniated cervical disc. For instance, my friend was so into computer games for a while that he had really good eyesight, but he ended up wearing glasses. Therefore, I think it is very useless to lose health while investing time to study.
These are the reasons why I think computer games are a waste of time. If you do not become a computer gamer, I think it is right to study hard now and play games freely when you become an adult.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1385.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63210702341 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40111419572 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558528428094 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6327722129 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.25 100.406767564 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.95 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253466534539 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835203671504 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591367219015 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177355962201 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0628633003062 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.98 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.0 10.002688172 40% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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