Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Rules, the foundation of a society, have aroused discussions and even debates over the positive and negative they leave to the young people. In some people's view, it does not seem to be too strict for young people. Contrary to these people's opinions is my perspective that these rules are too severe for young people to keep to because of the education and the relationship in society.

When it comes to children, the first thing that comes into our minds must be education. Parents have to send their children to school on time. In the meantime, children are forced to compete with other students on campus to fight for more resources. It cannot be denied that these rules have caused enormous pressure on children. To stand out among all students, kids must study hard to get good grades in class, which means their leisure time will be occupied and as a result, they have got no time to work on their own hobbies. In my childhood, the competition between classmates was not so intense, providing me substantial available time to focus on computer programing which has become my career today. In addition, intensified by the after-class course, it becomes increasingly difficult to win the race because everyone is hard-working but the total resources are finite. As a consequence, children need to study harder than any period before which is terrible.

What is common in society's rules is the relationship. For a number of people, it is the most struggling thing to deal with. For instance, kinship. At the time of the Spring festival, we usually go home and meet lots of relatives that we haven't seen for a year. However, in many situations, those uncles and aunts will not stop asking you about personal affairs such as have you got a girlfriend, when do you plan to marry, and so on. They are asking because these are rules of society. Similarly, the workplace, which possesses even more annoying rules, especially the relationship with the leader. Getting along well with your boss is of great significance to your career including the opportunity of promotion, the amount of bonus. All these regulations contribute to a high percentage of depression among young people.

For all reasons I mentioned above, I can safely draw the conclusion that the rules in society nowadays that young people should comply with are too serious due to their pressure on education and their burden on careers.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...home and meet lots of relatives that we havent seen for a year. However, in many situa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, similarly, so, well, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90441176471 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68557557638 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563725490196 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3419210773 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.2857142857 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155189652802 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0437623617505 0.076458572812 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472000127774 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110601981117 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517080828099 0.0645574589148 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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