Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Society and people heve been changing from the early years of emerging modern societies. Neglecting this change will cause lots of harmful results for whole the society, especially for whome has changed a lot. According to the rapid pace of maintaining technology and changing lifestyle of people, society should change it's rules in order to coordinate with these alters. Youths and yong people always always have affected most by these changes, as a result they have special concerns that should be solved. Some traditional societies tolerate against revision this rules. I feel that societies and governments should not use strict rules about youths. There is lots of reasons for that which two of them are as follow:
First, The siciety has been changing from early days of emergence of modern societies, as a result of these changes, the values and needs of the people, especially youths has changed much.In these situations obeying oldfashioned rules and follow them will not be a rational decision and will bring some terrible consequences not just for youths, also for other persons in society. For example in the previous century, It was not accepted that girls can go to school and become educated in some traditional countries. As a result of this belief and rule all the burden of the economic of the society was set on the shoulder of men and create a terrible sitution for those countries.
Moreover, it's crystal clear that when the society set free to pursue his ambitious,needs and talents, with consideration of rational regulations, it would continoue its way toward the progress and success. Almost developed countries that is well-known for their financial and economic situation and high level of wellfare was once a society that decided to bring democracy for their people,especially youths. With old rules that chained the people for emerging talents no changes will occur for the fate of that society. For example in some countries that obey the comonists rules people are isolated from outer environment and the ruler will make progress hard for anyone whome want to progess in such countries.
To sum up, I pro the idea that governments and rulers should take easy about youths and other and remove the obstacles from their way if they want to become one of societies that continuely moving toward wellfare and salvation.However it's obvious that without any regulations anarcist would take power between people and cause deterious effects for whole the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, so, well, for example, i feel, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2095.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14742014742 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68294543103 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511056511057 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 105.29223182 48.9658058833 215% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.642857143 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0714285714 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35714285714 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132698105855 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549434821048 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385494265593 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082854617288 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373940849378 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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