Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that whole societies expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
With the developing of the modern society, there are more and more rules to confine the daily life for people. Thus, it is hotly debated by folks. Some of them are strongly believe that people are not affected by these rules. On the other hand, others contends the opposite idea that Rules are too strict for people to follow them, especially for young people. From my own perspective, I totally stand with the latter on with following persuasive reasons.
The first coming into mind is that young people have to obey some of regulation when they surf on the internet. It is a common sense that we have to register an account of a forum, then we can make comment or start a conversation with other users. However, these kind of forum requires some private information like SSN, Visa card number and family address. It seems like the whole society tries to make everyone transparent. Under this circumstance, our young people have to follow the rules and obey it, there is no other choices. Let’s take myself as an example, I totally believe that I am the victim of these rules, because I am unable to share my feeling on my own personal websites. It is an amazing way for me to release my pressure from life and academia. However, I cannot do it anymore, because it is impossible to rent a website with a virtual identification. Thus, I am afraid that some of my friends or relative will find what I did in my website. It is pretty awkward for me, therefore young people are bearing much more strict rules than ever.
In addition, young people are expected to get a higher academic performance from society. People are getting higher and higher degree in recent years, we cannot deny that an increasing number people want to learn more, but let’s face the fact that a much more amount of people are forced to get a higher degree to get the same position which was obtained by a person with a lower degree 5 years ago. My friends tell me that bank accountant is required for a master degree in economy and with several certification about accountant. It was completely different situation in 5 years ago. This position in bank just required a bachelor degree, and that is it. So from this example, I would like to illustrate that more and more people have the same level degree to compete the same position, then the bank have to raise the requirement to filter some people. During the rounds interview and examination, the luck guy are able to obtain this normal jobs. It is clear that young people have a harder invisible rule to follow.
Admittedly, Young people have more freedom in some area to some extent. It is the reward for these people who obey the confined rules. It is not hard to imagine that a programmer earn a big fortune and get a better life. What we do not know is that what a tough period for programmers themselves to learn the amazing technical skills. Like I said, people who seems live a life without confinement because they have already get through such a period.
On the whole, according to abovementioned opinions and ideas, I think it is crystal clear that young people are living a life with so many strict rules from the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'believed'.
Suggestion: believed
...ted by folks. Some of them are strongly believe that people are not affected by these r...
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Line 3, column 258, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...conversation with other users. However, these kind of forum requires some private informat...
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Line 5, column 498, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun certification seems to be countable; consider using: 'several certifications'.
Suggestion: several certifications
...for a master degree in economy and with several certification about accountant. It was completely dif...
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Line 5, column 873, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'rounds'' or 'round's'?
Suggestion: rounds'; round's
...ement to filter some people. During the rounds interview and examination, the luck guy...
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Line 7, column 424, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'got', 'gotten'.
Suggestion: got; gotten
...t confinement because they have already get through such a period. On the whole, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, thus, i think, in addition, kind of, i am afraid, on the whole, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2617.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 566.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62367491166 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5080605238 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471731448763 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.9 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3208795339 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2413793103 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5172413793 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.37931034483 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256904394644 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0706582734177 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762858250409 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160879269977 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521469592233 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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