Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Some people are too obsessed with buying or acquiring material things (expensive clothes and cars) because they think people around them will judge them by what they posess.
People always have different views on whether people around them will judge them by what they have. In my opinion, I agree with this statement since that people place emphasis on their reputations, delegent, and others respect.
First of all, it is crucial to earn people’s reputations from what they posess, and having something expensive materials can make people to earn reputations from people around them. For instance, my uncle, who is a billionare, always goes to shopping malls to buy some expensive watches. Furthermore, he often drives different cars to visit his clients. To be more specific, because of his fortune, many banks understand he has a good reputation, and if my uncle needs to have loans, the banks always accept it. However, if he does not have buy the expensive materials, he would probably not get the loans since he has a bad reputation.
Secondly, people usually care about whether people around them know they are hard-working or not, and purchasing several luxary items can help them to prove they are delegent. Take my friend, David, as an example. To elaborate, when he was a university student, he had to do several part-time jobs to make balance. Moreover, he also studied pretty hard, and got scholarship evry semester. That is, when he graduated from the school, he got into an outstanding international company. Therefore, he made a fourtune, and bought lots of expensive materials. Apparently, my friend’s experience can strongly suggest that buying the expensive materials can help people to know their delegent.
Last but not least, people generally place emphasis on their wealth to have people’s respect, and if they can show off significant things, they could earn more respect. For instance, a lot of famous basketball players are refugees and orphans. That is, when they keep practicing and enter into the NBA, they change their future. Furthermore, they buy some luxarious cars, and houses to present their success. Nevertheless, if they do not buy the expensive materials, people around them would consider them are still nobody.
In conclusion, I strongly contend that people around us will judge them by what they have. After all, since people focus on their reputations, delegent, and others respect.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT
Message: Use past participle here: 'bought'.
...accept it. However, if he does not have buy the expensive materials, he would proba...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, after all, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1902.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16847826087 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7367516845 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535326086957 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.5095329365 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5714285714 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5238095238 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90476190476 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366850036167 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110867028683 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112928626418 0.0737576698707 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242886903184 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698701427829 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.