Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Some people think making sure that others (influential people or potential employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments can help you to succeed. If you do not do this, you won't have a successful life.
The success stories of numerous world-renowned celebrities justify the idea that one's bright future is held in the palm of his own hand. Being discovered and acknowledged by influential people, or potential employers, is only a fortunate encounter, or a good opportunity. Taking advantage of their help might make it easier to obtain a satisfactory post. Nonetheless, whether one can finally succeed or not depends largely on his consistent efforts. Previous accomplishments have already become history. Therefore, one's strengths should be further developed and new accomplishments achieved, otherwise such opportunities will be wasted and futile. As far as I am concerned, being accepted and sustained by others is only an external rather than decisive factor of success.
As a matter of fact, not all opportunities lead to success. We should hold an objective attitude about the relationship between favorable chances and success. Kevin Geary used to say, " Success happens not by chance, but because you were given a chance and took advantage of it." In other words, meeting an opportunity is only a stepping stone toward a potential future success. Showing off before certain people and letting them know one's strong points might be helpful, but is by no means a decisive factor that directly leads to prosperity. If a person manages to convince an influential figure of his merits and achievements, he is more likely to be promoted to a higher position or work on an important project. That indeed paves the way to his success. Nonetheless, suppose this person becomes overly self-contented and stops making great efforts? Then the blessed opportunity will be wasted. No matter how brilliant his past used to be, his future will not be promising. Therefore, seize the opportunity and continue to work diligently, as this is the key to success. Neither step should be neglected.
In addition to great opportunities, tremendous efforts an d self-reliance, there are other essential elements that help to guide a person into their successful future. In today's complicated society, being successful is never an easy task, but involves the combined effects of those factors. To illustrate, many highly-valued inner qualities like wisdom, honesty, creativity, a strong sense of responsibility, modesty, generosity, courage and kindness are characteristics found in most successful individuals. Outstanding abilities and comprehensive skills are also required.
In summary, no one else is entitled to claim to be the only determining factor in a person's promising future. What should be taken into account is the real function of opportunities. The elements of success involve more than just attention from others. The untiring efforts of an individual are keys to success. After all, success never comes to those who are overly obsessed with waiting for opportunities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 516, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...have already become history. Therefore, ones strengths should be further developed a...
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Line 3, column 975, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...is past used to be, his future will not be promising. Therefore, seize the opportunity and c...
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Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...great opportunities, tremendous efforts an d self-reliance, there are other essent...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
...im to be the only determining factor in a persons promising future. What should be taken ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, after all, in addition, in summary, as a matter of fact, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2437.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41555555556 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.178030293 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595555555556 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.6932462229 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.2592592593 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 11.8709677419 202% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0763497616525 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0195300263675 0.076458572812 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.022770352294 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0431726334107 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0304350321046 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.86 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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