Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Providing Internet access is just as important as other services, such as building roads, so governments should offer Internet access to all of their citizens at no cost.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Currently, the internet has already become to one of the most crucial things in humans’ daily lives. In this case, there is an issue that whether our government should provide the free internet to all of citizens. Some people argue that the government should offer the no charging internet to whole people, well others otter that our government should not do that. The latter point of the view, I believe, is more reasonable.
First of all, it is providing the free internet to all of citizens that increases the financial burdens of government. This is because before the free internet was offered by government, everyone needs to pay for government. However, no one needs to pay for government after the free internet was provide. According to the research done by Yale University, about 800 million dollars were paid by individuals who used internet last year, and our government allocated these 800 million dollars for students who could not afford expensive tuition fees and building roads in some poor areas. Whereas, if our government provide the fee internet for all people, it means that our government will lose these 800 million dollars. Undoubtfully, the financial burdens of our government will increase a lot.
Secondly, our government should pay energy and money for making our internet more safety instead of just providing the free internet. This is because the current internet usually is not safety enough. Therefore, if our government directly offered the free internet to all of citizens now, some unexpectable problems will happen. For example, our current internet is not safety enough. Therefore, some hackers can access our computers and mobile phones easily through our internet now. in this case, if our government provide the free internet for all citizens, hackers will have more opportunities to get into more individuals’ computers. Furthermore, if a rich person connects the free internet, hackers will get into her or his computer to steal some vital information of stakes, that will cause a serious economics problem to our society. In this case, it is obviously to see that our government should pay money and energy for making the internet more safety not just providing the free internet to all citizens.
In conclusion, since providing free internet to all of citizens can improve the financial pressures of our government and is not safety enough, so I still insist on my point.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
... government after the free internet was provide. According to the research done by Yale...
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Line 5, column 486, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...phones easily through our internet now. in this case, if our government provide th...
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Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... enough, so I still insist on my point.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14393939394 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70256649816 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45202020202 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.166461396 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.210526316 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8421052632 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73684210526 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256024961957 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106380003325 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582791672499 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184535050378 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268724076297 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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