Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
University education has become expensive nowadays. Everybody can't afford to go to school, so university has many options through which student can attend school. One of them is loan. I believe that student should take loans for tuitions instead of working while studying. I feel this way for many reasons.
To begin with, already university has busy schedule with classes, projects and tests. It is really important that you should give your best while studying. Taking loans will give you more time to focus on your academics and with good academic grades. Good grades can take you to better employment opportunities which can be helpful to repay your loan after finishing your studies. I have compiling example for this, one my friend took a loan during his university year to pay his tuition. He used to study more than the other students because they had to work. He got better grades than other students. During placements, major companies approached him because of better grades. He could repay his loan in a short time.
In addition, having more time on hand can help students to pursue his hobbies and exercise for healthy life. Hobbies and exercise keep mind and body happy and energetic. Usually in universities years because of time, many students loose their hobbies and health. Either they will be studying or working in sedentary lifestyle, that can lead them to obesity and unfit life. And studies have shown that healthy person can concentrate more. For example, during my university year, I used to go for a run after my classes before I start my home study. That helped me in concentrating more. I could do more study within a few hours after run than I used do before. Hobbies and exercise keep mind happy and fresh.
In conclusion, I feel spending more time in studying will help to achieve more. Keeping hobbies and daily exercise will make you happy and healthy person. Because of these two reasons I think student should take loan.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...will make you happy and healthy person. Because of these two reasons I think student sh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, so, while, for example, i feel, i think, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1627.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87125748503 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42072672741 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52994011976 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 511.2 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.7534847751 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 62.5769230769 100.406767564 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.8461538462 20.6045352989 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247083379383 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688176610519 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747044771266 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161710369256 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445758316671 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 11.7677419355 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.08 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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