There is an old proverb in Chinese saying that a person who cannot keep his own floor of the room clean also cannot keep a country well-organized. Many people won't present any disagreement with it. However, I don't agree with this. It seems like a person's cleaning ability can make him more successful than those who do not.
To begin with, students who keep their room not neat and tidy sometimes means that they are more creative, which is also a key to success. According to an analysis conducted by a group of social scientists at Harvard, they did a long-durational experiment for two groups of students. One is the students who usually manage their room tidy and organized, the other is the students with the opposite. They found that compared with the students from "neat and tidy" groups, the disorganized students showed more interest in the subjects that relate to creativity and imagination like art, design, literature, etc. And get higher grades in those courses. Another longitudinal study also presents an intriguing phenomenon. Based on their surveys among the top 100 famous designers and artists in the 21st century, 85% of these creative talents' studios and offices are not neat and tidy. The reason these talents give is that a relatively messy environment is an ideal incubator for novel ideas since you never know when will you come up with an idea that appears on the juxtaposition between two random papers or irrelated items.
Admittedly, many people may say how could a successful person has an untidy room and disorganized capability. And then they might draw a conclusion that all the successful people are well-organized on the domestic scale as well as in their business success since they transplant their good habits into other fields that make them successful. But what I want to address is that this is a slope in the logic chain. Students who keep their room neat don't necessarily lead organized behavior in other fields. And also, a well-organized habit doesn't necessarily guarantee a bright future. For instance, as a teacher with 10-year experience in education, I witnessed many students who can manage their rooms very well. Some of them did have strong logical thinking and a sense of discipline, which seems like an advantage. However, I noticed that sometimes they make their room clean just because they enjoy doing so or they like immersing themselves in chores without bothering the surrounding. If success means better academic performance, I don't see any obvious difference between tidy students and relatively disorganized students.
To sum up, the factors that lead to success are diverse. We cannot simply bridge a direct link between a person's success and his or her cleaning ability.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, well, for instance, as well as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06828193833 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79166666063 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561674008811 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9012914045 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.043478261 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7391304348 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13043478261 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332044186155 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0896565291278 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982040800962 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178322466977 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103967395922 0.0645574589148 161% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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