Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in the future job, the ability to treat well to people is more important than studying hard in the school.
Succes in our life is the most goal for everyone in our society, Weather in future job or personal life. So whatever your aim to be successful in your life, you need to treat people well for the following reasons.
First, everybody after graduation needs to get work and your peers must surround every job. So you have to treat those peers well to be a successful in that job because of your work depends on them. For example, I have been worked in the medical company in marketing department since 2004 and working in that department needs an individual respectful speech to persuade the doctors and patient with an anew or readily available medicines. Because of I have an excellent using wards with each one deals with him, I realized after several months it works because the doctors are trying to contact either my manager or me to make a contract about the new or old medicine. Moreover, each time a got a excellent comments and incentives from my managers.
Second, if you decided to not deal with any person within your job, you would not do that because as I said you surrounded by them and you can not ignore them. For example, I had a friend worked with the same company, each time he was trying to ignore deal with people either in work or market or even not treat them well, although he was brilliant in the school. After several weeks he fired.
So, as a conclusion success in the future job depend on how you respectfully treat people not only on how you did in the school either pioneer or fail. You have to learn more about how you treat people well to get your goal and success in that goal.
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Essay evaluation report
Weather in future job or personal life.
Whether in future job or personal life.
So whatever your aim to be successful in your life, you need to treat people well for the following reasons.
So whatever you aim to be successful in your life, you need to treat people well for the following reasons.
Because of I have an excellent using wards with each one deals with him,
Because I have an excellent skill on using wards with each other,
Because of my excellent communication skills with h him,
each time a got a excellent comments and incentives from my managers.
each time I got a excellent comments and incentives from my managers.
After several weeks he fired.
After several weeks he is fired.
Sentence: Because of I have an excellent using wards with each one deals with him, I realized after several months it works because the doctors are trying to contact either my manager or me to make a contract about the new or old medicine.
Description: The token of is not usually followed by a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to of and I
Sentence: Second, if you decided to not deal with any person within your job, you would not do that because as I said you surrounded by them and you can not ignore them.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a negator
Suggestion: Refer to to and not
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flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2 //Some grammar issues. Read a good grammar book. You may read this one: http://testbig.com/question/grammar
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 296 350
No. of Characters: 1287 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.148 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.348 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.277 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 83 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 57 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 31 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.108 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.383 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.25 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e most goal for everyone in our society, Weather in future job or personal life. ...
^^
Line 2, column 440, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_I[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'Because I' instead.
Suggestion: Because I
...an anew or readily available medicines. Because of I have an excellent using wards with each...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 696, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...old medicine. Moreover, each time a got a excellent comments and incentives from ...
^
Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...lthough he was brilliant in the school. After several weeks he fired. So, as a conc...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 251, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...get your goal and success in that goal.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, so, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44932432432 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3296778973 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 212.727598566 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523648648649 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4288205975 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.16666666667 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286778221155 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111080965438 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08454763686 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196183221926 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654075398966 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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