Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Life today is vastly different from it was before. Many areas in the world are affected by the enormous changes that happened whether positively or negatively. Therefore, I adamantly disagree that because the world is changing so quickly, people are less happy or satisfied with their lives than people were in the past, because of the invention of technology is affecting crucially on our well-being.
First of all, flourishing technology has a tremendous effect on the new generations' education. The matter of fact, nowadays, young people are becoming passionate about squandering their time using sophisticated technology and improve their horizon. For instance, the availability of technology makes the life much easier, the new era can enhance their knowledge acquisition by utilizing the internet and taking online courses. So, it becomes suitable for students to achieve two goals at the same time. They can work in the morning, and taking online classes at night to boost their education. Besides, by utilizing the technology, young people can save money, because they are studying at home without using any form of transportation, they do not need to spend money on gas and even car insurance. Hence, the lives today is more comfortable than the past.
Second, technology has become priceless in term of benefit. Indeed, technical innovations make our lives more convenient and help the people to save money. For example, today, the people can communicate with their relative family from any distance. Recently, I moved from my hometown to the US, I utilize the internet to call my family, and I can spend ample time talking with them without any charge. So, the technical device helps the generation to strengthen their relationship with their roots. Also, the availability of technology makes our lives much entertainment because whenever the individual has leisure time, he can engaging in playing video games. However, in the past, the people did not have any source of amusing, and they were spent a massive amount of money to keep in touch with their relative. As you can see, the invention of technology has a profound impact on our prosperity.
For the reasons mentioned above, in my perspective, technology makes our lives more happy and satisfied. Not only it improves the new eras' horizon, but also it boosts our quality of lives. Hopefully, all people appreciate these technical innovations and use them to flourish the populace.
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because of the invention of technology is affecting crucially on our well-being.
because the invention of technology is affecting crucially on our well-being.
Not only it improves the new eras' horizon, but also it boosts our quality of lives. Hopefully,
Not only does it improve the new eras' horizon, but also it boosts our quality of lives. Hopefully, //inversion for 'not only....but also'
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flaws:
two reasons are relatively similar about 'technology'. Reasons/examples should be different.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 397 350
No. of Characters: 1997 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.464 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.03 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.713 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.905 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.217 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.457 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 73, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...logy has a tremendous effect on the new generations education. The matter of fact, nowadays...
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Line 5, column 629, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'engage'
Suggestion: engage
...the individual has leisure time, he can engaging in playing video games. However, in the...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 135, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'eras'' or 'era's'?
Suggestion: eras'; era's
...satisfied. Not only it improves the new eras horizon, but also it boosts our quality...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2063.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19647355164 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8083304056 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544080604534 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3785874439 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2380952381 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9047619048 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7619047619 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27646780759 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766042135318 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10268070851 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185700811754 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119154701351 0.0645574589148 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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