Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I absolutely agree with that statement, and I think ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school, for success in a future job. I hold this opinion for several reasons. First, although it is important to study hard in school due to gain success in your future job, but it is not sufficient, therefore, to me, ability to relate well to people is more important. Additionally, science and educational career is not as applicable and practical in future job as ability of well relating to people.
According to my point of view, although it is important to study hard in school in order to become successful in your future job, it does not seem sufficient for achieving success. In other words, ability to relate people helps one's to put himself in different situations and experience various conditions in real life, and also learn how to apply his knowledge , which he obtained from his school, in his future job. Besides, studying hard in school does not seem enough for finding a good job, because students only learn things theoretically, which are not usable directly in their job.
Moreover, science and educational career is not as applicable and practical in future job as ability of well relating to people. To illustrate, in developed countries and specifically modern societies, people should expose to their future job's conditions and relate well to people before they decide to start their job. For instance, I decided to start a part-time job about two years ago, because I was studying mechanical engineering and I was interested in experiencing some new things related to my profession, which was not taught in my school. So I went to Tabriz refinery complex, in order to gain some experience and information. It helped me so much, because I was in touch with people and I learned many things from them, that I could not learn in my school.
Generally, as far as I am concerned, although it is beneficial to study hard in school and obtain good educational resume', but the ability to relate well to people is more important than that.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, i think, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84033613445 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77311705652 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450980392157 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.8917617549 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.923076923 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4615384615 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.61538461538 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442036091937 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185542828847 0.076458572812 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.152873428181 0.0737576698707 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.307460077783 0.150856017488 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126982925945 0.0645574589148 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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