Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The technology has permeated each facet of our children’s live, that is an undeniable truth. Whether that fact has made them less creative than in the past decades is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I do not concord with that affirmation. this position is based on two reasons that will be analyzed thoroughly below.
First of all, inventions like video games have improved kids logical thought and abstractions. it is easy to see kids no more than 10 years playing complicated games of strategies with demanding goals even for adults. A clear example of that is “Call of Duty”, which makes the players not only overcome difficult situations, but also interacting with other players to pass the mission. As a result of that training, the youngsters experiment an enhancement in other areas like math or science, where they have to apply the logic or the team work.
Secondly, technology has improved the learning process making it more enjoyable, efficient and attractive to them. Nowadays, students have access to information and softwares which present extremely advanced subjects in a way that it is simple to assimilate. Furthermore, professors use tools like videos, animations or even interactive presentations, which motivate their creativity. A compelling example of that is Wikipedia. that platform has millions of articles, which give students the possibility to see different experts’ views about any topic that you can imagine, with just putting their doubt in a browser. Consequently, the young students have the tools to understand swiftly those topics and creating a solid base to nurture their inventive. To sum it up, the technology has given them the possibility to ask themselves new questions, which is the fundamental base of the inventiveness.
In summation, I am of the opinion that the technological advances reaching in the 21st century have increased our children imagination and creativity. this is based on their capacity to cope complicated scenarios in video games, and their capacity to learn complicated topics using the new tools at their services.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36283185841 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08707103424 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589970501475 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6922416656 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.941176471 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9411764706 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148634981597 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0457311772257 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416547454612 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927858741618 0.150856017488 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626998475588 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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