Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that advent of technology has brought significant changes to our lives. Yet there remains some disagreement as to whether the impact of modern technology on children’s creativity has been positive or negative. I strongly believe that the merits of technology on our kids’ creativity far outweigh its drawbacks. In what follows, the reasons to substantiate my point of view are presented.
First of all, it is an indisputable fact that technology has placed entire the world (and all information in it) at our fingertips and contributes to more innovation and creativity than the past. Children have the chance to find any kinds of information in all demanded fields promptly. In such a modern era with a vast amount of material online ranging from e-books and the internet, children’s mind has the opportunity to flourish and make them creative. Moreover, we can find lots of schools which hold special courses in order to boost kids’ creativity.
Further, and even more importantly, though, children’s potential could be altered by modern technology in many aspects owing to the opportunity on listening to music, watching movies and even playing games, and for these facilities our kids are more curious and innovative than the past. That is to say, if it hadn’t been for such materials provided by the technology, our children’s wouldn’t have been more imaginative today.
Admittedly, not all of the newly invented tools are reliable and helpful. Take the internet as an example, there is a vast amount of material online that would have considered detrimental and could suppressed children’s imagination.
To sum up, having considered the aforementioned reasons into account, I once again reaffirm my position that technology’s positive impact on kids’ creativeness is undeniable because of the flow of information and facilities provided by the modern technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, so, as to, first of all, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1658.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 301.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50830564784 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3303456403 2.67179642975 125% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574750830565 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.3159994874 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.538461538 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84615384615 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118365276615 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455429289801 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0302045348541 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0691808524165 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302743128781 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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