Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Illustrate the products more attractive is the main goal for commercial merchants. They do not care about the disadvantages of their products. This is a very important issue when we are talking about children. Personally, I strongly believe that a TV advertisement for children should not be allowed. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and the most important reason is that the age between two to five is too sensitive and critical for the kids. Absolutely, everything would have a strong effect on them and their future. While the designers are focusing on their duty, show the best picture of the productions, the disadvantages are not important for them. Advertisement designers always search for the thing that would impress their users. It is a crucial point that the pictures that the children are seeing on the TV program are not real. The parents forced to reject their children request to buying these products, and it would be hard to explain the reasons to children. It would make the conflict in the children mind. Why the advertisements are saying the lie? For example, my nephew always likes to eat chips and when I talk about the disadvantages of chips, he would say: why all the kids in the TV are eating the chips? It is conflict and such a contradiction in his mind and he does not know which one is true.
Secondly, the advertisements that their target group is children, are full of the color and cartoon characters. These pictures are attractive for children and they would affect by them. They are too young to understand reality and would ask to buy all of them from their parents. While, most of them are dangerous for their health, but they want to not only test them but also buy for themselves. For example, when the children are in the supermarket and watching the packages of the product, they would remember the pictures that they have seen and ask to buy it for them. For example, Personally, several times saw the children are crying in the shops and persist to buy the product by calling the character name, like Bobsfangi.
All in all, I once again reaffirm my position, that the advertisements do not allow in television because not only their age is crucial but also they are too young to understand the goal of them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'rejecting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: rejecting
...rogram are not real. The parents forced to reject their children request to buying these ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1913.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72345679012 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68237713255 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454320987654 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3728490715 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.9545454545 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4090909091 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68181818182 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126166591343 0.236089414692 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.046096282239 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478688977416 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0947442734295 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316187108678 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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