Television advertising often posses great effect commercially, urging one's desire of wanting certain products, this indeed helped the product merchandise to promote its stuff, but is it right to put the advertisement towards young children aged two to five? To a large extent, I agree with the statement that it should not be allowed. The reasons are listed as follows.
Firstly, at a very young age, children lack the ability to inhibit their own desire of wanting things he is interested in, children basically want what they see from the television, it might be toy cars, dolls, snacks, etc., this results in non-stop begging of the advertised products from their parents, through crying or anger, because they don't have money to purchase it on their own.
Secondly, television advertising may post an adverse impact on young children's personal growth, it may encourage materialism at a young age, that they started to pursue material goods as the enforcement of happiness instead of the pure joy of having fun just running around the park. When they grow up, they may neglect the other aspects of happiness that are virtue such as friendship or family bonding but to pursue more fancy products.
Lastly, although the product merchandise is most probably against the statement, there is no good to put one's profit mind upfront to any children's development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
..., through crying or anger, because they dont have money to purchase it on their own....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1145.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 224.0 407.700716846 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11160714286 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66780201105 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.674107142857 0.524837075471 128% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 618.680645161 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6003584229 34% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.317138537 48.9658058833 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.571428571 100.406767564 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 20.6045352989 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288654669217 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110749924807 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100096233105 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157621213831 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125562722525 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 11.7677419355 158% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.95 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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