Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has greater
influence on people’s lives than television has.
Nowadays, technology had made life more comfortable than ever. Some people believe the telephone has the most important effect on people's life. However, I hold that the impacts of television are more influential because it provides educational content as well as family entertainment for the audience.
Tv has prominent educational value. It can be used as a tool for learning in home and classroom. With the ranges of channels it offers, there is no shortage of educational content. These channels give people information about science, nations, the world, and sport, etc. all it needs is an intelligent mind to choose the right content. The education value of it increases with its powerful visual effect. It is shown that one's retention is better when they watch than when they pore over similar content in a printed book. Moreover, it offers the audience a chance to expose to different cultures. They familiarize individuals with people and places they couldn't encounter in daily life.
Second, television can be a catalyst for family interaction and entertainment. It is one activity that the family can engage in together. Thus they can strengthen their bond. Furthermore, it reinforces analytical and logical thinking in family members. Discussions are inevitable while watching programs, especially news items, documentary, and shows. People get the opportunity to react to what they see depicted on tv. Therefore, they learn to reason out and apply logical thinking while voicing their opinions. For example, films trigger such conversations at home. Specific scenes, responses of characters to situations, and the director handling of the plot give ample scope for appealing talks at home. Therefore television is an excellent device to consolidate relationships.
In conclusion, television has had a significant role in people's life because it offers valuable educational content and improves the family relationship.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46488294314 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02599632001 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.615384615385 0.524837075471 117% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6611907845 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.0434782609 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.0 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30434782609 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110807309592 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296113307813 0.076458572812 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348271468997 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0762113099485 0.150856017488 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288896393091 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.5 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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