Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has greater
influence on people’s lives than television has.
It is crystal clear that some technology devices have revolutionized our life, among all technological devices, telephone and the television have the more impact in our daily lives. However, in my opinion, television has greater influence on our lives. The ensuing paragraphs explain my reasons to this position.
First and foremost, television provides us a wide variety of programs for instance news, documentaries, animations, movies and that sort of thing, which not can only full our spare time but also can be informative. To be clarified, we could track of news, events and changes in our country and in the world, we could learn about a human being or evolution of a kind of animal by watching documentaries moreover, we could have fun and pleasure by spending time to watch comic movies. so, in this fashion, it has a huge influence on people’s lives through increase our awareness and knowledges. An example can drive this notion home. I remember when I was in elementary school, I saw an animation in television about dinosaurs. it was easy language and explain extinction of dinosaurs in a simple way thus it was the first time that I learned about dinosaur extinction. so, that is why I believe television is so impressive in our lives.
Second, television can leave a positive effect on the relationship of a family members. Put it in other world, in this progressive and complicated period that we live, family member have no longer spend time with their parents, sisters or brothers, everyone work hard morning till night to make money so, a television program is a great reason to gather family members to gather. Therefore, they spend time together to watch for example a movie and in-between they talk with each other, share idea and have fun, which could have a great influence on their relationships. For instance, my parents are very busy during day-time and we could have time together, the only time we can hang on and have fun and talk is when we watch a comic stand up in the weekend. so, in this way, the TV improved my family relationship.
In conclusion, although telephone and television have changed and facilitated our lives, if I want to rank the influence of these two devices, I will give the high rank to the television. this is because, it offers lots of low-cost informative, educational and entertainment program and besides, its impacts on improvement of people relationships is undeniable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93430656934 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94158470829 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540145985401 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.3828588358 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.294117647 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.94117647059 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0873719873343 0.236089414692 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0327868084747 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317194369006 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0584388198821 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00708971409053 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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