In the contemporary world, with the galloping expansion of the business, increasing companies create new marketing and advertising strategies in order to attract more potential consumers. Several companies put their ads on TV directly to get young children's attention. Some individuals believe ads should not direct toward kids from two to five years old, whereas the other holds the antithetic attitude. In taking various factors into account, I am fully convinced that it is conducive to having advertisements for children. There are numerous reasons why I hold this perspective, and I would like to explore a few ones here.
First and foremost, a large number of parents do not know exactly what their kids like, so they can inevitably buy some toys that are not their children's favorite. The children can directly tell their parents what they want by virtue of watching these ads on TV so that their parents can avoid wasting money on the things their kids do not like. Children aged two to five do not have many opportunities to go shopping because they usually cause plenty of trouble for their parents, such as getting lost, needing to go to the restroom constantly, and crying loudly in the shopping mall; they usually cannot pick the toys they like. Provided that the children can see the ads on TV, then they can tell their parents what they crave selected from various distinctive ads. And the parents do not even need to go to the store as they can get them online most of the time. All in all, these ads can save a great deal of time and money for the parents.
Another equally compelling contributing factor lies in the fact that these products on television ads usually have high quality. Because it is shown on TV, a lot of consumers will buy them for their children. Assuming that the product's quality is bad, or even more severe, not safe for children, then the company will be sued by the parents immediately. And the negative news and comments about the product will go viral, ruining the company's reputation in a short period of time. As a consequence, the company not only cannot make more money by advertising their products but also needs to compensate for the consumers who had an awful experience, which is unworthy. Thus, the quality of the products on TV ads is approved. If the ads toward children are banned, then we cannot select the safe products readily as we cannot see which company is confident about their products by putting ads on TV for everyone to judge and comment on.
In summary, combined with what has been demonstrated above, it is sagacious to conclude that it is crucial to have television ads for kids aged two to five.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, whereas, in summary, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77155172414 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5764146513 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502155172414 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7431049498 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.526315789 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47368421053 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133236231144 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465712024414 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382964514186 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103486206017 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477501624206 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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