Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
I agree with the statement that television advertisements aimed at children aged two-five years should not be allowed. I think this is for three reasons which I will describe in the following paragraphs.
First of all, young children are not mature enough like adults to distinguish what is good and what is harmful to them. They cannot determine the advantages and disadvantages of a particular product. In fact, they are not even old enough to understand the advertisement. Thus, having television advertisements aimed at children will do no good. For example, a five-year-old child cannot understand an advertisement on child diapers. Similarly, he cannot understand a commercial on nutritional powder milk for young kids.
Secondly, if the children won’t understand the advertisements directed at them, then I think it would be unwise for the companies to spend on these commercials as it won’t profit the company in any way. Instead, they could spend this money on something else which can truly prove beneficial for the company. Instead, they could spend they could spend that money on the development of a new and more improved product.
Lastly, some of the television advertisements which are not beneficial for young children might influence them to get the product. This might pose a task for the parents as they will have to convince their adamant kid who is deeply influenced by the ad that they cannot buy the product for them. In some cases, television advertisements promote products to children which are not a necessity such as some type of toy. Now, some parents cannot afford to buy every toy which their child view on the television. So, they have to face a lot of difficulties while convincing their kid.
To sum up, I think that it is not wise to allow television advertisements for young children as it might cause more harm overall and fewer benefits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, lastly, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, thus, while, for example, i think, in fact, such as, first of all, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 313.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06709265176 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98290530282 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514376996805 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8591052946 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2941176471 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.76470588235 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229431266331 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797583028794 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117421540824 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159628370931 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118800415493 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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