Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
There is no shortage of opinion on whether television advertisements directed towards should children in the age group of two to five years must be allowed or not. Personally speaking, I believe that advertisements directed towards you children must not be allowed. There are two reasons for my claim. I will discuss the reasons supporting my stand in the following paragraphs.
First of-all, the children within the age group of two to five years are very naïve. They do not have understanding about most of the stuff shown on television. And if on top of that there are advertisements directed towards them, they would not be of any use. The children are very young to even interpret what is being shown. Thus, due to the children not having the ability to understand the advertisements, there is no use of them.
Secondly, there is another reason as to why should advertisements directed towards children must not be allowed. As stated earlier, the children are very naïve and do not have much sense about what is right and wrong. What if they misinterpret the advertisements they see? For example, there is and advertise regarding a videogame and how the child in the advertise demands for it and his parents fulfil his wish. The children may get a wrong idea through this. They may start demanding stuff and may refuse to comply until their wishes are fulfilled. Hence, there should be no advertisements directed towards children.
To conclude, children have not yet developed a good sense of how things work. They are still young. They may not understand the advertisements and may also misinterpret them. Thus, advertisements directed towards children must not be allowed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 353, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...arding a videogame and how the child in the advertise demands for it and his parents fulfil h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, thus, as to, for example, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 281.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02491103203 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93271255462 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473309608541 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 427.5 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7879169817 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.6 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.05 20.6045352989 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.386666555486 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127000488474 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115605508235 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257245920566 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0848398890247 0.0645574589148 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.52 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 86.8835125448 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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