Before tending my opinion, I think it's crucial to take a quick glance at arguments of both sides. Although, some people may hold this view that these advertisings have some advantages for companies and it helps the economy but some people think the disturbance on the children's from this issue is greater than benefits. From where I stand, I concur with this second group who believes that this kind of advertisings and slogan should not be allowed. The reasons behind this viewpoint are discussed in the following paragraphs.
First reason coming to my mind consolidating my standpoint is that the children's are naive and can't distinguish between these colorful and various advertisings. In this regard, they believe all they watch on tv even though they don't know these all are just some lies from companies to just sell their product. On the other hand, these companies know how to use tricky slogans like a poem in which all children memorize it. Therefore, the children force their parents to buy this product for them. For example, couple years ago a toy company made a very meretricious advertisement about horror masks and directed toward children. near three months the poem used in this advertisement became epidemic and they sold enormous amount of their costume without considering the undeniable harmful effects it makes on the unconscious memory of the children's.
Another reason which deserves some words here advocating my attitude is it makes the bad habit of watching tv for too long in the children's. However, many parents use these fallacious advertisements as a pacifier. Mother put her children in front of the tv to watch them just to do her routine work easier. After a few years when the child grows this wrong habit of watching tv for long hours make a harmful effect on their lives. In this regard, they become intractable for parents. For example, I remember my sister was using these advertising to placate her children just to have more time for herself and in the result when the child became near seven years old she was watching tv for near six hours a day and she couldn't prevent her. At last, they got help from a psychologist to cure this pernicious habit.
By all points mentioned above, Tv advertising which towards children should be ban.by the same token, parents have to be more vigilant about the impinges of these slogans on the children's.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, i think, kind of, by the same token, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1981.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89135802469 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61705100291 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553086419753 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.9781201238 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.055555556 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12964768511 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472797783348 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0417300492077 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943550116289 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0264660640118 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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