Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Traditional ways of celebrating holidays are much less important today than they were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
We live in an age where the use of technology and social media has caused the merging of cultures from all over the world, so much so that our own traditions are being forgotten. Therefore, it is important now, more than ever before, to celebrate holidays the traditional way.
With the vast use of social media, we have the advantage of being highly connected with people all over the globe. This has facilitated communication, through which, along with other factors, traditions from other countries have found their way into ours. Our culture today is highly influenced by the Western one. We dress, talk and eat the same way as they do. With time, this may cause future generations to forget their culture and traditions altogether.
There is absolutely nothing wrong with foreign cultures and it is encouraged to be accepting of them, however, it does not mean we completely replace our culture with theirs. Since we already follow the western culture on a daily basis, be it for its practicality or to simply follow the lifestyle everyone else has, it seems appropriate to follow our own traditions on holidays and special events. Of all days of the year, it seems prudent to keep traditional holidays sacred in order to preserve our culture. This is also the time when the elders of the house are adamant on celebrating in accordance with the tradition, which is why younger generations are obliged to don traditional clothes, exchange traditional greetings and eat local food. The coming together of all these elements can help us celebrate holidays the way they were celebrated by our ancestors and indirectly helps keep the culture alive while also providing entertainment to everyone.
In short, safeguarding traditions is very important in an era where our culture is endangered by cultural globalization, and celebrating holidays traditionally is the best way of doing so.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, in short
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08012820513 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84909577395 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570512820513 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.6340913578 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.923076923 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15384615385 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23857892051 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941238852898 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507976978706 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160543018502 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00930084360021 0.0645574589148 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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