Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Two people can still become good friends if one of them has more money than
the other one does.
One of the most integral needs of humans is being in a relation with others; since friends compose the most part of our relations, it is important to have good friends. While some people believe that different folks could make a good friendship even they are worlds apart from wealth aspects, others think that having a lot in common is necessary to have a stable and long-lasting fraternity. I personally believe that it is hard to make a good relation between two people from diverse aspects such as wealth difference. In what follows, I will elaborate on my reasons.
First, common interests and attitude join friends strongly. The more similarity between folks, the more chance to make a good and healthy rapport. We as humans, based on the Maslow’s hierarchy of needs, have multitude needs which differ in any stage of our development. A person with a specific age and financial situation has a unique attitude which differs from the other person’s one in different levels. Therefore, people who are so different from one of these factors cannot understand folks from other social strata, which prevent them to be good friends. For example, in all my school years, I have not seen a couple of folks from different wealth social strata who they were close friends. It seems that being wealthy or not affects how people think about friendship.
Second, wealthy people have some specific behaviors which are not tolerable for many of the usual people. Hence, as a rule, they face many difficulties to make a good relation, even though there is always an exception. Generally, wealthy people are so arrogant and they tend to show their superiority complex to others. Middle-class folks or lower-level guys, even they are not wealthy, they have their pride, and they cannot swallow their pride just because they do not have a lot of money. This discouraging attitudes separate those guys from each other. To put it into perspective, One of my classmate, in Boston university, was from an aristocratic family, who has an inclination to show his wealth to everybody, at the very first of our acquaintance we attempted to be a good friends. However, when time passed, he showed his true colors; and whenever we had a conversation, he spoke his mind. This habit hurt his friends one by one, and at the end of the year nobody from our general class could tolerate his personality. As we see, for any reason, there is a small chance that a wealthy person and a low-income guy could make an intimate friendship.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that people who are wealthy and poor could not be a good friends for a long time. This is because that they have different attitudes, diverse needs, and unsimilar behaviors and because they could not bear each other as well as good friends.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2317.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85744234801 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6590231688 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490566037736 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0333152804 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.318181818 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6818181818 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170328900139 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532512028438 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441331588921 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116178282147 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239027602839 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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