Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
To me what I think is that the responsibility of educational institution is to prepare the students to survive in the modern world, the responsibility of the university is to prepare the youth for modern world, to take charge from our elders and not just to survive but to prosper and for that I think education is not just the only thing that is responsible, sports and social activities are equally as important as the education.
While education prepares us to tackle and solve complex problems to understand the things, social activities and sports gives us the experience of team working, they teach us how to follow rules, practically how to work together, how to respect each-others opinion, in real life one is always working in a team, so such things can never be taught inn library or in lectures, theses experiences are gained by participating in the social and sports related activities, and if the university is investing more in sports and social activities it will motivate the students to take part in those activates, by them they will learn how to work in a team, how to communicate with each other and many valuable experiences like that and these experience will be help them to perform much better in the real world problems, I personally believe that a group of people that have no or less knowledge of team work, but individual student have high educational knowledge will still perform less when compared to a team with better knowledge of how to perform in a team, but have less knowledge.
Secondly, participating in sports activities makes our bodies smart, a healthy person who exercises daily and participates in sports is less likely to fall ill than a person who spends most of his time in the library or the lectures, participating in sports, helps to control our metabolism, optimises our metabolism, it will burn the unwanted fats, making our bodies not just smart but also healthy and active, and it’s a no brainer that a physically healthy and smart person is more likely to outperform a person who lazy in every time. Also participating in sports makes our response time low, that increases our thinking speed of brain, something that is proven various time using experimental research, it makes us active that helps us perform in the optimised state in the real world.
In conclusion, I would say that universities should spend equal amount of money on social activities and sports as much they spend on education, because to prosper in the real world and to work effectively and optimised we need both the technical knowledge and the experience of team work and respecting each other in a team, we need to be fit mentally and physically to produce the best results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...sible, sports and social activities are equally as important as the education. While educ...
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Line 2, column 869, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...elieve that a group of people that have no or less knowledge of team work, but ind...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...erform a person who lazy in every time. Also participating in sports makes our respo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2246.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84051724138 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8224037874 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450431034483 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 709.2 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6003584229 24% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 92.0 20.1344086022 457% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 285.943630809 48.9658058833 584% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 449.2 100.406767564 447% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 92.8 20.6045352989 450% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.6 5.45110844103 268% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121260003286 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703451704259 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0236326758682 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0789251276349 0.150856017488 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191202810805 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 47.8 11.7677419355 406% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -13.44 58.1214874552 -23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 19.3 6.10430107527 316% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 38.0 10.1575268817 374% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.98 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.96 8.01818996416 137% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 10.002688172 310% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 38.8 10.0537634409 386% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.247311828 303% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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