Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
It is crystal clear that universities and colleges can form students’ character and are of profound effects on diverse facets of their life. In this regard, there is a controversial issue that whether sports and social activities are as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. As far as I am concerned, universities and colleges should pay attention to sports and social activities besides educational ones, because these programs have significant benefits in student’s personal and social life. In the following passage, I will shed light on my reasons.
To begin with, doing sports is of positive effects on student’s mental and physical conditions. In other words, sports help students reduce their stress and have a healthier body, mind as well. In this circumstance, students will perform better in their academic activities and get better scores. Support for this idea came from the study conducted at Oxford University. According to the study, the average score of students who had done one kind of sports along with their studies is 30 percent more than the average score of ones who had not. Also, sports activities aid students in being more creative, focused and better in memorizing details, which are necessary skills to deal with difficulties in their personal life.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating my stance is that participating in social and sports activities assist students in not being one-track minded. To clarify, by taking part in non-educational activities, students have an opportunity to learn a skill on how they can manage two or more activities together without being confused. Michael Nicolson, educational expert in Wilson College, says that “people who can properly handle more than one thing at a time are successful not only in their social life as a manager or clerk but also in their personal life as a wife, mother or father.” This worthwhile skill will be easily acquired by participating in non-educational activities in universities and colleges.
In conclusion, according to the above-mentioned reasons, sports and social activities are of positive influence on the social and private future life of students. Moreover, students learn to handle more than one responsibility at the same time which is a valuable skill. I highly recommend that universities and colleges pay equal attention to sports and social activities like they do to educational ones and support them financially in order to benefit students from the positive points of them.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, moreover, so, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33415841584 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00538984995 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512376237624 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.7124494386 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.6875 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276630650717 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102571918883 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099344385994 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194276804213 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0995533410606 0.0645574589148 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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