Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my perspective, sports and social activities at are as important as classes and libraries and because of that should receive similiar amount of financial support. Sports not only help students to be more healtier but also, learn them how to socialize to other students and to be more responsible. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint my case.
The first thing to mention is that, sports and social activities can improve health of students. At universities and colleges, students are faced with a lot of home works and assignments which need to be done by students. Since, these projects have specific deadlines, students can be under pressure of stress and tension. In this situation, engaging in sports activities can help student to release their negative energy and open their mind which is essential for their health. For instance, when one of my friends was in the university, he was really stressful about our final project's assignment. This stress did not let him to focus and make him sick. After a while, he became a member of football team and his previous problem never happend to him again.
Another points worth mentioning is that students learn how to socialize with other people. Students who are engage in social and sport activities learn how to talk and interact with other students. Moreover, their abilty to make friend is far better than students which are studying all the time. Therefore, since the students interact with other, their ability to socialize with other people is better. Also, students attaining in group acitivities become more responsible because every member of a group has a role which has to done by them. For example, students in a group study has to help each other to enhance their knowledge and fix their mistakes. These kind of responsibilities are useful in the future life.
Finally, since activities such as sport are substancial for students at universities and colleges, it is necessary for them to receive equal financial support for two main reasons. The first reason is that the students can be more healthy, and the second reason is that they gain ablity to socialize with other people and be more responsible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...o socialize with other people. Students who are engage in social and sport activities l...
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Line 3, column 108, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'engaged'.
Suggestion: engaged
...ize with other people. Students who are engage in social and sport activities learn ho...
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Line 3, column 657, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...their knowledge and fix their mistakes. These kind of responsibilities are useful in the f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, moreover, really, second, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99450549451 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66943638113 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502747252747 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2291273344 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6842105263 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.78947368421 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190436800064 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650116094073 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879203235533 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144676798387 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743855884237 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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