Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Universities play a crucial role to equip students with a potent weapon called knowledge. Some people believe that universities should allocate more budgets for educational matters such as classes and libraries which can augment students’ knowledge undoubtedly. Others take the opposite view point. In my opinion, universities should allot equally their budgets for both academic matters and non-academic affairs such as sports and social activities. Non-academic facilities improve students’ physical and mental health and enhance their social interactions skills.
University is a place where students enter to achieve both knowledge and skills in various aspects of life. It wouldn’t be enough if students have been provided with only academic facilities such as libraries and classes. They need to spend a deal of their time to social activities such as attending to different workshops and exercising at gym. Not only guarantee these activities their physical and mental health but also increase their efficiency in learning subjects. Recent studies have shown that there is a strong correlation between the brain’s function and learning process. As physical activities would transfer more oxygen to the brain and produce more energy to the whole body. Moreover, social activities can reduce boring during uninteresting classes. When I was freshman student, difficult core classes like mathematic made me boring and exhausted, so to undertake my challenging courses I attended at theater group’s university which made me more energetic and euphoric. Today’s world doesn’t need single-task people who just develop one aspect of life such as sheer knowledge. Therefore universities should provide services for students to participate in workshops, social groups and sport programs.
Social interaction is always a challenge. Enhancing students’ social skills is a necessary part of the university’s goals. As students after graduating should be prepared to tackle critical responsibilities in society and they also should be qualified to hold a deserve job. Nowadays, companies would hire employees who are accomplished at both technical knowledge and social skills. Therefore, universities should pay attention to the social activities as much as educational affairs. The best example that comes to my mind is when I was a student, I was too shy. I couldn’t able to present my lecture in front of students and teacher. This lack of confidence made my grade low significantly. In addition, I couldn’t express my opinions when all classmates and I communicated with each other in friendly meeting. So, one day I decided to participate in a social behavior workshop at university. After that, not only my confidence has been increased significantly but that workshop also helped to improve my scores. Conclusively, social activities at university benefit students either their job’s future or their scores at university.
To sum up, universities should provide a place where students can develop their both knowledge and social skills to become more valuable to the society in the future. So, this is crucial that both educational matters and social activities are considered equally in terms of financial supports due to sports and social activities will have been improved students’ health and communication abilities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
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Line 3, column 1096, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...aspect of life such as sheer knowledge. Therefore universities should provide services fo...
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Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d they also should be qualified to hold a deserve job. Nowadays, companies would hire emp...
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Line 4, column 271, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...o should be qualified to hold a deserve job. Nowadays, companies would hire employe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, in addition, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2852.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62524654832 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0588949932 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510848126233 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 881.1 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.4888795575 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.3448275862 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4827586207 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.20689655172 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195133623759 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539072079262 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443093885559 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137222396685 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214434517178 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.08 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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