Invented in the early 19th century, the television has found its way in our living rooms and has a part of our lives. It is no doubt that television is a medium of information, which delivers news rapidly around the world. It is also a device that provides us entertainment and pleasure. However, I believe that televisions have more disadvantages than advantages for individuals.
First of all, crime and violence are frequently depicted on television and may have negative effects on children. Children who see violent acts are more likely to display aggressive or violent behavior and also to believe the world is a scary place. Ongoing studies have shown a lasting correlation between watching violence on television and aggression. Research also suggests that aggression in childhood will continue into adulthood. Viewers sometimes imitate violent, criminal or other risky behaviors they see on television, and end up in injuries, or even commit crime as a result.
Secondly, watching too much television links to serious health hazards. Sitting on the couch watching television does little to burn calories intake in the body. As a result, many viewers become obese. Increasing numbers of advertisements on TV also lure people to purchase unhealthy food, which worsen their health conditions. In fact, studies have shown that there is a strong correlation between watching television and obesity. Furthermore, viewers sometime watch late into the night and results in sleep difficulties, depression, headache, and other illnesses.
Finally, watching television may ruin family relationships, as viewers begin spending more time watching television instead of communicating with their family or their loved ones. For example, the emergence of video streaming makes viewers watch episode after episode without interacting with their family members. In addition to the lack of communication, the disagreement among different perspectives may trigger family conflicts and raise more tension in the family. Moreover, controversial issues and biased information presented on television always bring heated debates among family members and worsen the relationships.
In conclusion, the invention of television affected people all over the world, the growth of video streaming has become an irreversible trend. However, the disadvantages of televisions lie in violence and committing crimes, health related issues and unhealthy relationships. There is strong evidence that television has more negative effects than positive ones.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71240105541 4.8611393121 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04456449277 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569920844327 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.416356662 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4090909091 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2272727273 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 3.85842293907 337% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143565630935 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426562789996 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352925271973 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792961480213 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183260911244 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.54 10.9000537634 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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