Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, it is often claimed that youths have no influence on social decisions. On the contrary to this popular belief, there are still those who point out that young people as a most powerful member of society have an incredible influence on fundamental decisions, it seems to me that youths as the largest portion of our society could affect their nation in many aspects of view. Using the reasons and examples below, I am going to illustrate my viewpoint.
To begin with, I truly believe that the majority of young people especially in the developing countries are high-educated who have brilliant perspectives about the future of their homeland. So, it could be an extraordinary opportunity for authorities to hear the youth’s voice and exploit it to improving their governing. To gain this advantage governors give a chance to young people to opt hometown’s mayor or even in the high level of decision, they could participate in the presidential election. For instance, in my country juveniles from age 15 are able to vote to elected presidential candidates.
Another paramount fact, which should be taken into consideration is that young people are capable of affecting the willing of society and governments acknowledge their potency. A prime example of my own experience may shed some light on this point. About 3 years later the state decided to change the marriage law which gives permission to men to get married to 3 women at the same time. Although it sounds a bit weird, not only women but also men protested against this immoral and unfairly law. After some weeks of protection, protesters compelled the government to reject this law.
On the basis of the points mentioned above, I am convinced that youths as the majority part of a population are able to influence their society in different dimensions. They act as an important ruler and opt for the town’s governors which is obviously affect the future of society. Furthermore, young people have this capability to consent to or against the laws which may affect all members of society and in this way, will participate in the subsequent generation of society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, still, for instance, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07584269663 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92600644185 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564606741573 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7273806558 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.466666667 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161186628264 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534050677382 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457638296186 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103203284287 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049608508021 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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