Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Young people today are less dependent on their parents than young people in the past
All the families try to nurture their children in a way that they become independent when they are around eighteen years old and this approach has been prevalent in all human history. This trend prompts a controversial issue whether nowadays young people are more independent or dependency rate in the past was more. I adamantly subscribe to the idea that these day young people are more dependent than past
First and foremost, the young people are more relying on their parents in order to obtain consultant in different facets of life. In this world, the probability of getting into the emotional trouble is a lot and if something happened in their life, the role of family is indispensable. Take my personal experience as an example, My wife left me 2 years ago without any explanation. One day she got home and said that I don’t want to live with you anymore because I am in love with someone else. After separation, I was in the brink of being insane. I was in an unavoidable situation and my mind did not work properly to find a solution for the darkness I was living in. I will not forget my parents' patronage since they forced me to participate in therapy and I had stayed in their home for a year. Comparing to the past, however, these emotional troubles were less because people tended to dedicate their lives to their husband and wife.
More importantly, young people cannot prosper in this era without the financial support of their parents. First of all, since the majority of jobs are available for those having university degrees, the students are obliged to continue their education in order to reach upper levels of education and strengths their resume for after graduation. Admittedly, they need to pay the tuition of the university and without help of their families, it is not accessible. After graduation, there is a lag between entering into a job and graduation. Accordingly, they need the patronage of their families too. In the next stage of their lives, they are going to marry someone. Renting or buying a house is completely hard, no matter how much a person can save in 10 years. In my country, as an example, an average young person should save his income for 30 years to afford him to buy a house. paying for holding a marriage ceremony is another story that without the assistance of families is not possible. It should be stressed that people were under less economic pressure in the past and they can easily afford many expenses alone. Accordingly, it is crystal clear that we cannot consider young people as a self-governing person anymore since they rely on their families financially.
In a nutshell, I firmly believe that family supports their young sons or daughters more than decades ago.
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...hey rely on their families financially. In a nutshell, I firmly believe that fam...
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...ons or daughters more than decades ago.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79281183932 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67643591033 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.532769556025 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3701261527 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.045454545 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.22727272727 5.45110844103 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272794064076 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757992029049 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846429443628 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175539688108 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312732809358 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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