Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people are the most energetic and active population of a nation that can bring about significant changes in the country. Although many believe that the young cannot make great impacts due to their immaturity, I am of the opinion that youngsters play a significant part in the future of society.
First of all, political elections are undoubtedly crucial for future of a country and the young can profoundly effect future events of their nation through contributing to the election affairs. Although the elderly might make decisions wisely, they have not propensity to change the future by taking part in elections because they prefer to live the last part of their lives in peace rather than engaging with the political issues. Therefore, the vast majority of people who participate in elections are the young. A recent survey conducted in University of Tehran's faculty of political science revealed that over 90 percent of the participants in presidential election are youngsters; this fact evidences the pivotal role of youth in electing a competent politician.
Furthermore, sometimes government enact legislations and implement policies that pose threat to the community, and just young population are brave enough to oppose those harmful policies. This courage stems from the feeling of affection to the nation that exists in every young person. For instance, a few years ago, government planned to build a dam in a rural area in order to accumulate water for supplying water in dry seasons. However, this dam would force the inhabitants of that rural area to abandon their houses because the accumulated water was supposed to submerge all of the adjacent villages. Fortunately, the young people of that region held a rally and protested against this policy to prevent its disastrous effects. Government complied with the demand of protesters and refused to construct the dam. This example clearly demonstrates how the brave youngsters are able to make a great impact on the future of community.
It is fair to conclude that youth are capable of making significant changes in the society because of their tendency for making future and their bravery.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...umulated water was supposed to submerge all of the adjacent villages. Fortunately, the you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1820.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21489971347 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78704225574 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550143266476 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8754481503 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.0 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9285714286 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64285714286 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109796675428 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407286745441 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0255290201146 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0652535618798 0.150856017488 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0137848214791 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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