Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
After high school, students should have at least one
year to work or travel. It's better than attending
university straight away.
without any shadow of doubt, education plays a prominent role in every individual’s life. Although some people might adhere to the idea that students should go to university right after high school, others possess the conviction that spending at least one year in travel or having a job before joining to university. As far as I am concerned, allocating a year to have a gap between high school and the university is a good call for students. I will elaborate on my reasons through the following paragraphs.
To start with, one should take into account that people who graduate from high school are just some teenagers without any real-life experiments. they just have been in school, among their peers, and surrounded by their own comfort zone. The students need to come out of their shells, and be more engaged with others. For instance, not only going on travel makes young people more independent, but also leads them to deal with different cultures and people. this will help them to be more confident, and their personality boom in an effective way. A relevant study in Germany asserts that university students who had chosen to have a gap year before going to university, were about 32% more socially active. As a result, they had functional relationships helping them go through their studies. this result shows how important it is to get a year off education.
The second reason I would like to mention is that the students will face the chance to find the fields they are interested in, and pick up the major with wisdom before entering the university. this will save their time and money by preventing them to change their fields consequently. take a personal experience as an example: back to the time I was going to university, I could not decide which field I really want to work on in the future. my father suggested that I take a year off and try to find a job, so I thought it is not the worst idea. I found occupation as a tour guide in the local museum. At the end of the year, I was so fascinated about the job that I decided to pick a major in tourism. Now, I am a happy tour guide and travel agent, all thanks to my fother’s advice.
To take everything into account, I am of the view that students should go on travel or have a job before they attend to university, because it will help them to improve their social skills and they will get the opportunity to realize what field of study they are going to choose in the university. The more they get experienced in their lives, the better their judgments improves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, really, second, so, at least, for instance, as a result, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61758241758 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6519596052 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501098901099 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2909661499 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.047619048 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159479346825 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451649132026 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473463248488 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107881410748 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060277798262 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.