Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Arts are sometimes posited as the soul food for human but most of the time it is seen that laypersons generally don't associate with this sentiment. It is more easier to reach people using the language of athletics and other forms of sports with which the people can relate easily. So, I disagree with the statement and it is my opinion that goverments should invest more money in the field of athletics rather than spending for arts. I will disscuss the reasons behind my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the success of the athlets becomes a matter of pride for their nation and can give the nation hope. Sports in any form can be an ambassador for a nation. It is seen in the past that sports has been used to forge bond between two nations. Sometimes, it is also seen as a matter of might. My own experinece is a compelling reason behind my opinion. During the commonweath games last year, one of my friend participated in the "High Jump" segmant. And, to everyones surprise he won the bronze medal, which is a first for our country in High Jump. All the newspaper covered the story in the front page. At that time there was an unrest in the area from where he was. The disputing parties came together in honour of his achievement. This how much impact athletics can have and thus goverment should sponsor such activities.
Furthermore, athletics being related with physical activities, promoting this can have a positive effect on the public health. If such activities get proper nuture from the goverment and become well funded, more people will be interested in such activites. These sports can become an alternative source of entertainment. From another experinece I saw the rise of a local club in my area which worked with the drug addicted people. They helped them to rehabilitate by the engaging them in athletics. With time, their success become more noticable and the local authority began to fund the club as it helped with maintaining the law and order situation. If this can be implemented country wide with the the goverment behind as financial support, this can have a great impact.
In conclusion, with the stated reasons above, I storngly believe that the goverment should spend more on the atheletics, sports clubs and sponsor athletics teams. Thus, it can have a greater positive effect than by spending money in arts.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, thus, well, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83088235294 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6191784736 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53431372549 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5216825412 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.125 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.29166666667 5.45110844103 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195008137996 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491111470476 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634488657632 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144517907813 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0726021332194 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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