Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sports frequently show up on newspapers as it gives a popular trend and spread out around the whole world among daily life of people. So in my opinion, I think government should spend more money in support of athletics. As well as athletes should be much more honoured than artists since what they showed us in Olympic through TV are incredible performance with excellent skills that were fully trained with strength and sweat.
Firstly, more athletes doing sports will inspire more people to fall in love with working out which is a good way to stay in health. There was time when my cousin spent all his time watching sports channel, and he kept telling me he wanted to become a professional mountain climber, from which one’s persistence strongly inspired him as well as the powerful-built body shape of the climber. Now we met several times in the gym and he’s getting pretty much fitted and told me hardly get a sick in a year. The reason to put more financial support for creating more TV channels about sports and fitness can attract more audience to watch and learn. As a result, it gradually gives a motivation for the entire nation of leading a positive way, as well as potentially can also be a nice way to treat obesity and sloth.
Secondly, there will be high chances of getting championship if more financial supports are put in. In order to obtain more material support to help athletes getting stronger in both body building and skills, there required more financial outcome on getting varieties of facilities and food resources. As well as spend more money to employ professional nutritionists to take care of athletes. If these could be satisfied ,there will be heaps of increase of athletes.
In conclusion, I seriously hold the opinion as the decision of government should spend more money in support of athletics with reasons that is ways of healthy inspiration and one athlete can be proud of getting championship and a glory of nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85798816568 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67612013761 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582840236686 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.5084400558 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.307692308 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 5.45110844103 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233116190702 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093391542648 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895339392656 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170853468994 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0607416807935 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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