TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things related to schoolwork.
Parenting has always been a prominent issue which has engendered heated debates among people. There is an argument about selection of ways to spend with children. While most people believe that education will assure children’s promising future so parents should specific their time to school assignments, other hold opposite view stating that using this precious time to have joys with their children, like playing games or doing sports, is a better way. As far as I am concerned, I believe parents should dedicate their time with children on fun stuff rather than doing assignment related to school. The ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
To begin with, childhood is short compared with a man’s lifespan. However, childhood does play a vital role in one’s life. Therefore, parents should build premium memories for their children, like hiking and playing games together. These non-utilitarian manners are beneficial to build their self-esteem and self-worth, vital for a fulfilling life. For instance, parents should hang out with their kids and do some sports instead of doing homework. In this way, children could genuinely enjoy this amusement without under any pressure from school work. Throughout the sports, children build an intimate relationship with their parents, also they will have more strong body which prevent themselves from getting illness.
Furthermore, Tiger Mom is a terrible social problem in China. For this unusual epidemic phenomenon, most parents in China merely focus on the results from children’s studies. But grade and schoolwork are not central value of humans. Putting too much pressure on children’s shoulder would cause terrible consequences. There is news every year that students who couldn’t the heavy pressure decide to end their life. If parents only focus on grade, the following consequence can be devastating.
Last but not least, it is an excellent opportunity for parents to teach their kids to understand, that knowledge does exist anywhere instead of studying in school - gaming could also offer a window for them to chase the wisdom. As Rachelle E. Goodrich said, “Life is a puzzle, a riddle, a test, a mystery, a game—whatever challenge you wish to compare it to.”
In conclusion, it is judicious to say that having fun together and make memorable time with children is significant for every family and a right way for children to have a happy and dynamic life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35384615385 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87236302011 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617948717949 0.524837075471 118% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.876730849 48.9658058833 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4285714286 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289426296138 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716894817106 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926663143146 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157115700332 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11801426455 0.0645574589148 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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