In general, children spend most of their time in the house having shared activities with their parents. However, in this developing era with lots of busy parents, one side of the mentioned shared activities has been blurred. As a result, parents should pay attention to how they fill their children's free-time to have the most effective strategy for children's growth. So, allocating activities for this regard is so essential. In this regard, many parents want to know which activities better leads them to their purpose. There are many ideas and alternatives in this case, but I think doing things which are related to the children's schoolwork is the better choice. In what follows, I will delve into two reasons to shed light on my response.
First reason that comes into my mind is that, this strategy will increase the educational performance of children. Parents, who do some activities about their child's schoolwork, have directly observation on their child's studying methods, and they can control these methods better than their teachers, owing to the fact that their child is more comfortable with them. The more efficient practicing methods, the more children's marks in schools, and as a result, their educational performance increases a lot. As I remember, when I was an eight years old child, my mother always allocated her free-time to work with me on mathematics. Since she knew my characteristics better than my teacher, she tried to solve my problems in different way, and to be honest, it worked better than punishments which I had been seen in school.
Second, should parents spend their free time for working on children's schoolwork with them, the children can learn some new issues for their future life. Since parents show their children how much they care for them, even in some aspects which they do not know much about, children learn the concept of responsibility in their childhood. Parents all know how to have fun playing games or sports with their children, but caring about their unfamiliar aspects, shows the children how much hard having responsibilities is. Again, on those days, I thought that if I get married and have child, I should help them this way, because I felt really comfortable to solve my problems in home, instead of in school with lots of punishments. Maybe if my parents had allocated their free-time to play with me, I would not have had this feeling.
To recapitulate, we can conclude that parents can spend their free time to work on their children’s schoolwork with them. It’s because this strategy not only increase children’s educational performance but also, teach them some new issues for their future life. Thus, I personally suggest that all parents dedicate some of their time to working on their children’s schoolwork and being aware of their situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rk and being aware of their situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, thus, i think, in general, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2374.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07264957265 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78072164847 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482905982906 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 686.7 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2917210978 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.7 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263533328806 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987199991748 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730207333639 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185188265363 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0520843487146 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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