Undoubtedly, one of the most difficult preoccupations of governmental decision-makers is deciding about how to allocate their limitted budget to several money-required regions with different priorities. Many factors are involved in distinguishing between the priorities; sometimes governments spend their money on a region which needs supports. When it comes to this point, many politicians want to know supporting which region is at higher priority. While some governments financially pay more attention to supporting the arts instead of athletics, I personally repudiate this strategy, and strongly think that benefits of improved sport regions weights more than the arts ones. In what follows, I will delve into two reasons to shed light on my response.
The first point that comes to my mind is that spending more money on the sport regions will result having better health condition of the whole society in the long run. In general, children should be encouraged by their parents to continue any activity; parents mostly pay attention to horizons of a region which their children choose. If parents find out that a region is supported by the government, they would be more enthusiastic about advising the region to thei children. Therefore, governments can have more future sport-men by supporting sport regions and funding them. Actually, existing more encouraged children who have regularly sport activities will result in having healthier society.
Second, should governments spend more money in support of athletics than any other region, sports are counted as an indication of a country in the world. By and large, national teams participate in tournoments in purpose to deffense their counties' rankings and indicate how their countries are developed, especially in sports. If any national team had not been supported by its government, athleters would not have been able to be a sign of their country. Thus, the world-wide signiture of their country will be in threaten. As I remember, having chosen for basket ball students national team of Iran, I wanted to take part in an Asian cup tournoment in which fifteen other countries had planned to participate. After our first match, I heard from a Japanese player that they had judged us because of our clothes conditions. Actually, most of the participated teams had new brand clothes had been provided by their sponsors, but due to our limitted budget, we could not be allowed to buy similar clothes. If the Iranian government allocate more budget to us, never did Japanese players and the others scorn us and look at us as people who had not been supported even by their government.
To recapitulate, we can conclude that sport regions are at high priority regarding allocating budget. It is because supporting athletics not only better introduce the whole country's situation to the world but also will increase health condition of the whole society. I strongly propose that governments should financially pay more attention to sport-men.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, while, in general, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2531.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28392484342 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90844992802 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517745302714 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5070355654 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.523809524 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8095238095 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.19047619048 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180191109322 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623051951955 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06454831025 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121547597078 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279138466771 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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