Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As government regard investment as an essential part of its program more and more, where it should spend money, supporting artistic and art, or supporting athletics, become a huge concern on the body of government. in this regard, some people suggest government should spend its money for hold the athletics in internatioal communities, while others have opposite view, and say arts and their art works need more investment. in my view of point, the former point carries more weight. I will try to examine my reasons as follows.

the first reason that should be stated here is that in any community althetics resemble a dynamic map for all people belogining of that society, in particular younger. nowadays, everbody is busy, they have a lot of excuse for have no exercise. some have space problem, some have physical problem, others have time problem and so forth. if government invests in sport area, many people, even younger, can take few mintues out of their busy schedule which make lots of difference. all of these, no doubt, are possible when our athletics feel saticfaction towards their contribution in country's sport. on the other hand, when people see even one of county's player have bitter feel about the government in terms of investment, absoultly, they become frustrating toward take part in any mach.

in addition, a cometent player not only can equip others, especially young people, with insight full view over the whole matters in specifc sport, but give them rewarding experience for dealing and taking part in that field of sport.

another subtle point is that the quality and quantity of athletics in all items, in general word: county's sport, indicate the level of that country. if one country wants to achieve better recognition in the world, it must spend more mony for improving the overall situation of them. small example may give some light to this point, every year, Fortune magazine puplishes a specific issue of most successfull country in various view, such as agriculture, economic, althletics, and so on. if take serious look at althletics chapter, best player are in best county with high level of sport system. finally, a person in that country is more apt to prosperity if take part in sport’s scope.

In conclusion, taking all in to account, there are many advantages on investing and supporting of athlitecs and goverment should consider this issue as its first priority when it comes to the matter of investment.

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Average: 8.5 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in general, in particular, no doubt, such as, in my view, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2077.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0782396088 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63416996296 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581907090465 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1934490183 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.176470588 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.82352941176 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170306898376 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051000077021 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641954772005 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0922549569563 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0828452319516 0.0645574589148 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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